is this ok?
 

does this look ok to you?

http://pornpf69.com/freesites

(I will be adding some linklist links on it)

the two images shouldn't be touching since they have nothing to do with each other otherwise I don't see anything wrong with it.

I will remove the FHG (from the inside area...)

Removing the Free Hosted Galleries would be a good thing. Many link lists request that images be on the same domain unless you write to them and ask permission to submit free sites with sponsor galleries first.

It wouldn't hurt to check the rules with each link list - some only allow maximum of 30 images per free site... don't give away more than you need to... :)

When it comes to writing text - does it turn you on?
Will the text grab the guy by the balls and encourage him to get his cc out and buy a membership :)

Where are you sending your exit traffic? To another adult site?
Work on the basis here you may be sending under 18's to another adult site. Grab a mainstream domain with mainstream advertising and make money via a mainstream site :)

2257 info - where is it?

Just my thoughts :)